This keeps the direct age callout because that phrasing has matched the account audience best.
The page stays light on words because the photos need room to work. Eye contact, posture, and a small change in confidence are what make a man slow down.
Photo #9 should sit far enough into the set to earn the click without making the page feel slow.
The set is built for a slow look. Some photos work right away. Others are better the second time through.
